Bill Soprano
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on bsop's lyric:
"Ok I want to single this out because it perfectly sings!! The meaning is still a little random though...
each line needs to serve the hook. so take each line and put the hook after to check to see what it communicates:
Well I could walk your dog, take him out for breakfast
but I'm never gonna change your mind..
huh? about what? see how it's not really great without a purpose for leading to the hook?
whereas "I could state my case" BUT I'm never gonna change your mind...
That is saying something that follows and connects to the hook.
Keep going!!"
"Well I could walk your dog, take him out for breakfast. Wash your car, make it look fine. I even went out and bought your favorite bottle of wine. I'm never gonna change your mind."
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Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on bsop's lyric:
"Ok I want to single this out because it perfectly sings!! The meaning is still a little random though...
(more)each line needs to serve the hook. so take each line and put the hook after to check to see what it communicates:
Well I could walk your dog, take him out for breakfast
but I'm never gonna change your mind..
huh? about what? see how it's not really great without a purpose for leading to the hook?
whereas "I could state my case" BUT I'm never gonna change your mind...
That is saying something that follows and connects to the hook.
Keep going!!"
"Well I could walk your dog, take him out for breakfast. Wash your car, make it look fine. I even went out and bought your favorite bottle of wine. I'm never gonna change your mind."