Brad Roberts
Brad Roberts
Crash Test Dummies
"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"This by the way would give us four couplets in a row--call it a verse, 8 lines long--and thus the next verse would begin to develop the story a little more, now that we have the picture painted. Make sense?"
(more)"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"Further, if we do this, I think the tone needs to switch: we should go from this general picture into a specific event, as in, for example, And then one fine day Mr. Santa looked up,"
(more)"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"i wish a could erase the last entry, i didn't mean to hit submit. the tone does need to switch, but my example is cut off and not very good."
(more)"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"in other words, having established the scene, lets dive into action. "
(more)"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"just joined now. ellen, your photo is GREAT. and so are the lyrics you've picked. its fun to be on the other side of this game! hello all. best, bardley."
(more)"The Truth is a tyrant, the Devil a bluff/ The old wolf in waiting to huff and to puff"
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"ignore this - it is meant for the first entry only. my bad."
(more)""The woman she stared, I started to shake Can only think, 'flashback,' am I even awake?" Todd Hughes Thanks Todd, for your iambic pentameter. You are one of the few who bothered to do this. When you write, 'The woman, she stared,' you are, I realize, trying to keep the iambs going. However, whenever you can, avoid sounding like you are trying to fit into the meter; this is very fucking hard, and I fight against it all the time. In this case, how about: The woman stared, and I began to shake All for now. Good to hear from you."
Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"by the way, if this sounds terse or unfriendly, i don't mean to be. i slipped into lit teacher mode, here, I'm afraid!"
(more)""The woman she stared, I started to shake Can only think, 'flashback,' am I even awake?" Todd Hughes Thanks Todd, for your iambic pentameter. You are one of the few who bothered to do this. When you write, 'The woman, she stared,' you are, I realize, trying to keep the iambs going. However, whenever you can, avoid sounding like you are trying to fit into the meter; this is very fucking hard, and I fight against it all the time. In this case, how about: The woman stared, and I began to shake All for now. Good to hear from you."
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Brad Roberts commented on lordpigface's lyric:
"his pee"
(more)"I think we should put Matt's following couplet just before Ray's Most excellent line: "He mumbles and scratches out lists on the trees; and draws golden angels in snow with he pee""