Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on nonnairene's lyric:
"I love "playing with fire" and of course that's alright! It's all up for grabs! I also love rhyming it with "desire"...I'm trying to avoid saying "heart" again so it can shine where it already is in the first part of the song!"
(more)"(I) Feel we could be playin' with fire Risk losin' everything we built Come clean! Let's state our hearts' desire Get rid of all the fear and the guilt. My submission for this round. I used the play with fire imagery in the last round..and I wanted to have another try. The word fire has popped up a time it two so far..I noticed So I hope that's ok..."
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on nonnairene's lyric:
"I'm confused!! What are the lines you want to submit? There are so many of these to go through I can't go back and find earlier...so if you can type the lines that would be easier for me to follow!
thanks! :)"
"Show you proof (the "oooo" rhyming bit)...just my thoughts for a 3rd line And a thought for 4th line for the (I) rhyme...."Time after time" These lines submitted following comments and feedback ....on the use of a word I used in one earlier submission..."platter"....and possible the in with the word"matter"........ Show you proof/Time after time da da da DA DA....Does it even "matter?" Etc..etc.."
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on nonnairene's lyric:
"I love the platter....you can see I"m looking for fresh words and ideas...just that one word makes my imagination take off:
Well I could take my truth
Serve it on a platter
_ _ _ (oooo rhyme if pos here)
_ _ _ _ ("I" rhyme good here)
And I'm not sure
It even matters why
I'm never gonna change your mind
just one possibility...
these lines still aren't right...but just and example of one of mayby 8-10 different senarios I"ll try just off the fresh word "platter"!
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"When I think of all the junk we get served on a platter/ wish I could take you back to a much simpler world/Cos I know life is sometimes tough/and our dreams often shatter.....then scatter....like dust/ And who am I?.....So I'm never gonna change your mind."
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Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on nonnairene's lyric:
"I love "playing with fire" and of course that's alright! It's all up for grabs! I also love rhyming it with "desire"...I'm trying to avoid saying "heart" again so it can shine where it already is in the first part of the song!"
(more)"(I) Feel we could be playin' with fire Risk losin' everything we built Come clean! Let's state our hearts' desire Get rid of all the fear and the guilt. My submission for this round. I used the play with fire imagery in the last round..and I wanted to have another try. The word fire has popped up a time it two so far..I noticed So I hope that's ok..."