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Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on TAM's lyric:
"I like the story here...get a sense of who these people are...it's still in need of a few tweeks...
LOVE hard to hear...but what's hard to hear? So much stronger to be specific!
Here's another approach just inspired by a few snippets of what you wrote...notice how it fits perfectly with the melody with no extra syllables or accents in the wrong place...
"The truth has never lost to fear
It'll wait forever to be known
Till the moment that it all comes clear
Flowing like a river over stone"
or
"The truth is never lost in fear
It waits until it's moment to be known
Shining with it's light so clear
Flowing like a river over stone"
See how this opens us up to a whole new vista?? and we can go from this to the next section feeling like we really went somewhere...this is what I'm looking for.
"
Lyric by TAM:
"For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed"
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I get the letter I deserve is up to me, I write the words (or know the words)
Good or bad, the times we had (Morgan)
Led me here so I can
Finally see — the one I trust is me
I feel the dark, or see the light
Only I can guide this flight
I know the way, or I'm flying blind ...
Whether good or bad, the times we had (Morgan)
If I don’t know just where to land, I'll find
My way
Whether good or bad, the times we had (Morgan)
If I don't know just where to land, the moon will guide me
I know I can find ... my way
Good or bad, the times we had (Morgan)
If I don't know where I'll land
The stars will guide me, words provide me
Strength ...
With my love letter (Jodi)
I feel the strength inside me now
With my love letter (Jodi)
I feel the strength inside of me
If we’re not together
I can choose to write the words I know will set me free
Be well,
With love,
I’ll write soon
Be well, I promise I’ll write soon
Gratefully sending love to you
Gratefully,
With love from me to you
Sincerely, I’m sending love to you
All my love, be well, I’ll write soon
Eternally, I promise I’ll be true
Forever yours, I promise I’ll be true
Forever yours, I send my love to you
Gratefully, I send my love to you
The room in my heart
It's like KNOWING that you're right,
then learning you were wrong.
That feeling when you’re SURE you’re right
And find out you were wrong
There’s a room in my heart with a table for two.
Daddy’s been waiting, now Mama’s there, too.
Don’t be afraid of a few big waves.
You’re the deep blue sea.
You’re just a wave,
I’m the deep blue sea
I’m not your kitten up a tree. I’m here because I like the view.
Spoiler alert
I’m the author of this story, I’m the girl who wrote this song
I’m not your kitten stuck in a tree
All I need is a tree to climb
I dare you. ?
Only on the darkest nights / will you see the Northern Lights
We lived on the end of Nowhere Road But the stars were silver and our hearts were gold
Only in darkness do you see the stars
When you collaborate with other songwriters/lyricists, are you generally in person or do you work via Zoom or the like? If the latter, how does that affect your process?
Build a bridge to your world
Using all of the love we have
let you know that you’re not alone, /
walk this path that we never planned /
and help you through the missing things (Patricia)
I'll be there for everything (Merilee / Jayne)
Know you’re worth every tear
Walk with you on this path
Let you know that you’re not alone
So when the real you breaks through again
I won’t be missing things
And when the real, true you breaks through
Show I love you all that I can
I used to be your little boy
Now I’m your man
if you forget the time we have /
the love will last /
(So when I’m missing things it won’t be everything…)
because all of the love I share /
is real, even if you forget /
But I’ll still be missing things …
Fill every moment with love /
Even if it’s forgotten again /
I’m afraid of missing things …
Grab every moment, so/
I can fill it with all the love I have/
‘Cause I know I’ll be missing things…
I can make you feel less alone/
Give you all of the love I can/
‘Cause I know I’ll be missing things…
Let you know that you’re not alone /
Give you all of the love I can
We won’t walk this road alone/
I’ll be with you every moment we have
Don’t dare to miss one more thing
I don’t dare miss one more thing
The best thing that I can do …
But now there’s no time to waste
But the truth is, right here, right now —
If today I can make you smile,
If I can bring you some joy today
What can I do right now?
I want to take care of you
Forgotten does not mean gone
Precious time that I have with you …
In the time I have left with you,
With the time that I have today,
Even if you seem far away …
Every laugh that we shared/ every smile that you gave/ every tear that you dried/ every time you forgave me
The sound of your laugh, those times you were brave / every tear that you dried, every time you forgave
Every hug, your advice, every laugh and your eyes / every smile and your walk, every late – night talk / Every thing / Thank you for everything
The parent you were, a talk without tears / an easier time without so much fear / What I’d give … to have it all back today, today
Like your pose when you smile, how you laugh at yourself / the way that you mix up the jokes that you tell / and your smile / when you would catch my eye / that’s why (I’m missing things)
Forget about all the moments I’ll miss /
I’ll stay here and now, give you one little kiss /
And not think … about what lies ahead … don’t want to be /
Missing things
I try not to focus on when you’ll be gone /
And the change that I see when that sundown comes /
And the pain … of what might lie ahead … let go of /
Missing things
When I think about all / I’ll miss when you’re gone / it hurts too much / the list is too long. / And I’ll miss …the moments we have to love … today.
Don’t want to be Missing Things, because they’re everything …
Rather than focus on memories I’ll miss / I’ll stay in this moment, try hard to not live / in the past … or live the pain ahead. / Instead of …. missing things
The stories you tell, how you laugh at yourself / the way that you dance when I’m holding your hand / Most of all … I won’t forget moments of … your love
The stories you tell, how you laugh at yourself
The walks that we take, our swims at the lake
In your eyes … the tears as we take our time … with goodbye
You humming along, as I sing you your song
(Or play you your song)
Your hugs, your advice / Your laugh and your eyes /
The way that you dance / and holding your hand /
And your love —
But this will never end / our love
Your hugs, your advice / your coconut pies / your stories about GRAMma / and holding your hand
I remember us talking
that one night, til 3am
About college and girls,
Memories and life, and friends
I remember the way we’d
stay up late, til 2am /
Talking bout college and
neighbors, and girls, and friends.
I remember the way we would
stay up late at night
Talking bout mem’ries and
Friends, and school, and life
I remember you showed me — how you could — still be strong,
When as a young widow —you felt life had done — you wrong.
I remember the way that you showed me how to live
When life was its hardest — at least we sure thought it was then
No, I can’t heal what’s broken / or mend what’s / been torn apart.
But the days we have now / I’m holding here in / my heart.
If the ‘memries’ (memories) are gone / like our dreams at the end / of the day
Only one thing remains / yeah, nothing can take / our love / a-way.
Our love / will / stay.
I remember the way you / would welcome / in all my friends.
“Always room for one more / at our table and hearth,”/ you said.
I try to make moments to hold in our hearts / even if they are gone like the flash of a falling star
I remember you dancing around the room with Dad / When he passed away, we cried and you held my hand
You danced with your true love around the kitchen floor / Held my hand as I cried when Dad wasn’t there anymore
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The hills are too steep, the valleys too deep / I’m not that strong
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The hills are too steep / I don’t have what it takes to be strong
I want off this ride that we’re on / The twists and the turns are too rough / And I’m sure this must be wrong
I don’t like this ride that we’re on / The twists and the turns are too rough / and I’m not sure that I’m that strong
I wish I could wake every day
Rewind and not know that this darkness will steal you away
I wish I could wake every day
not knowing this darkness
Is trying to steal you away
There’s fear in your eyes, I can see
Like the end of a song, till the music is gone
You’re here with me … (but I’m missing things)
Someday soon all I know will be gone
The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine
You’re here with me (but I’m missing things)
In my mind I know something is wrong
My heart feels It won’t be too long, all I know will be gone
You’re here with me…but (I’m missing things)
But the one thing I clearly see
Is the fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine—it’s killin’ me
And it’s makin me scared
The fear in your eyes looks exactly like mine. We’re aware … (I’m missing things)
And I’m so afraid.
Each time we’re together you’re further and further away
We close our eyes and breathe / Our fingers interlace/ Stolen moments heal / little gifts of grace
Hate causes hate / Only love can heal /
We attend to our wounds, take a breath, start to feel
Hate causes hate / only love can heal / Attend to your wounds / you’ll remember how to feel
So the choice is mine / if I fall, I’ll rise
So the choice is mine / broken wings can fly
So the choice is mine / wake each day and fly
Face to face / move a little closer / Step by Step (John Lee) / unsure what we’ll find / Side by side / the view will be worth the climb...but I’m never gonna change your mind.
Face to face / (we) inch a little close / Round a bend / (that’s a BIG surprise) / (It’s) one steep hill / but the view will be worth the climb / Still I’m never gonna change your mind! (Or “Step by step” for “It’s one steep hill”)
Inch by inch / we move ahead together / Step by step / unsure what we’ll find / It’s one steep hill / and the VIEW will be WORTH the CLIMB...but I’m never gonna change your mind
Face to face / move a little closer / Make a turn / unsure what we’ll find / Step by step (JohnLee) / the VIEW will be WORTH the CLIMB...But I’m never gonna change your mind
We weave our web / twistin and a-turnin / So entwined (KeithCurtis) / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) (two counts on ties) / We raise our heads / and look each other in the eye / Still I’m never gonna change your mind!
In the end / here we are together / A spider’s web / with ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / And like our lives / we’ll always be intertwined / But I’m never gonna change your mind
So we weave our web / really in a tangle / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / grow and entwine / I shake my head / and breathe a great big sigh / ‘Cause I’m never gonna change your mind
So we weave our web / gettin in a tangle / Ties that bind (KevinOsborne) / grow and entwine / You know tight knots / are always the strongest kind / But I’m never gonna change your mind
But this goes both ways / Try so hard to listen / (I) think and pray / Look to above / The reasons clear / listening is a way to love / (or “listening is an act of love*) / But I’m never gonna change your mind
a tiny little spark
(A) glimmer of a hope / flicker of a light ... (Apologies if this has been said; so many of us are attracted to the same words! Like moths to flickers of light!)
(a) casual remark / quiet little light / grows until it sparks / the notion that I might / Might just / Might be right
One of my remarks / shines a little light / This could be the start / the notion that I might / might just / might be right
One of my remarks / echoes in the night / this could be the start / the notion that I might / might just / might be right
You may feel a spark / You may see a light /Could be a fresh start / the notion that I might....
I’m throwing this to the hookist universe: I have a Line 3 I kinda like, but I haven’t fgured out how to lead up to it. “Like climbing vines, we’re so intertwined / But I’m never gonna change your mind.”
(Yeah) it’s hard to feel / we’re wearing armor / an iron shield / is one way to hide / but lets be real / no matter what I try ... I’m never gonna change your mind
So I try to feel, take off the armor / the iron shield I’m hiding behind / show your heart, and I will show you mine ... still I’m never gonna change your mind
Yeah we're living in a world of fear
Well another voice is hard to hear / It hurts to think our hearts have closed / But maybe hope can heal the fear / That you don’t mind when we feel so opposed
Well, I’m not afraid to make some waves / I’ll keep speaking out loud and clear / But if I let love lead the way / Maybe you will find a way to hear
Well, I’m not ashamed of making waves / And I know my voice will drown out any fear / You said there’s so much more to being brave / Than being the only sound than anyone can hear <I>
Well, another voice is hard to hear / I worry that our weary hearts have closed / I can’t go on and live in fear / Don’t like knowing that we’re feeling so opposed (Or: … feeling so alone) Resubmit with edits from Beth’s input
We can’t feel much if we’re wearing armor / We can’t hear much if our hearts are closed / We can’t think much if our minds are made up / I’m not in favor of being opposed
For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed
Beth Nielsen Chapman commented on TAM's lyric:
"I like the story here...get a sense of who these people are...it's still in need of a few tweeks...
(more)LOVE hard to hear...but what's hard to hear? So much stronger to be specific!
Here's another approach just inspired by a few snippets of what you wrote...notice how it fits perfectly with the melody with no extra syllables or accents in the wrong place...
"The truth has never lost to fear
It'll wait forever to be known
Till the moment that it all comes clear
Flowing like a river over stone"
or
"The truth is never lost in fear
It waits until it's moment to be known
Shining with it's light so clear
Flowing like a river over stone"
See how this opens us up to a whole new vista?? and we can go from this to the next section feeling like we really went somewhere...this is what I'm looking for.
"
"For both of us, it’s hard to hear / Do you think our hearts have closed? / The truth is, my biggest fear / Is you’re in favor of us being opposed"